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Princess Luna may enter your dreams,
To enlighten your nightmare,
and end all the screams.

But who can wake her up at night,
when our nightmares are too much to bear?
Maybe our dreams just might give her a fright.

Even our worst fears may be too much for her too take.
Our phobias could become her own if given the chance.
Let's hope our visions don't make her heart ache.

Next time you wake and your imagination comes to an end,
Thank Princess Luna for taking the stance,
For it is her, whose pschye must now bend.

Now there she lay, tucked in bed all warm,
ready to rest in her blissful lair.
And our fears manifest in a full fledge storm.

Princess Luna may enter your dream,
To enlighten your nightmare,
But can she be helped when her tears start to stream. . . ?

- Jesse Knoblach
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Cover photo by :icon90sigma: =90Sigma [link]

Some notes about the poem:

I wrote the poem to show how Princess Luna's ability to appear in dreams can back fire on her.

The poem does not have a fixed syllable form. Most of my poems are written to my taste in which I feel it can be read fluently without feeling carried on or stopped short (But like I said, to my taste, so maybe some of you won't read it that way)
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~yugijak Dec 18, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
First off, I like the style that you use where it rhymes when you want it to, so it's much more organic than other poems.

As for the subject matter, all I can say is bravo, you have done it yet again. You have your own rhythm to the poetry that can be easily received for the open of mind, and the subject matter is still my favorite, because it explores things that no one really seems to look into and talks about the possibilities.

In short, you do what no one else does.

Keep it up.
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=Clitical-Hit Dec 18, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks o3o I have many other poems in progress right now.
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~yugijak Dec 18, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Goodie!

^.^
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:iconarbarac:
Our imaginations come up with the most interesting of things and it does make me wonder what she does with the worst of our dreams. If she is the one who watches over in the night does she truly combat all that we fright? An interesting little thought I had had watching Scootaloo tremble through the woods at night.
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*flyingcatsandglitter Dec 14, 2012  Student General Artist
Ooh this is a lovely poem :)
Though in second stanza, line two last word should be bear .
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~Siggiday Dec 14, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
You might want to change Phobios to Phobias but otherwise it's lovely.
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=Clitical-Hit Dec 14, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you for pointing it out xD
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*WyvernByLaw Dec 14, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
My little brother is watching and old Russian cartoon in another room
So while reading this there's some damn sad music playing in the background
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=Clitical-Hit Dec 14, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Trololol? o.o
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:iconseizureman245:
Simply brillant with the poetry
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