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Life without death is a curse,  
Death without a life is a crime.
Either one quick song or a never ending verse.  

Luna, the princess of the night,
Will forever live on past each life,
To rule over darkness but never see the light.

Then there's the ruler of the day,
The all mighty Celestia, to which we pray.
The only one who has seen both the black and the white, but never the grey.

We can never understand their pain,
or do what would be right.
For every life they rule, will one day die in vain.

They've lived this long,
neither to die.
They put on a straight face in our presence to make us feel strong.

But we'll never understand the inevitable lie.
for when they return home to the castle,
They have nothing to do but cry.

Cry for the ones who faced their ends.
Weep for the ones who can't be saved.
Sob for the lives who claimed their mark as friends.

Life without death is a curse,  
Death without a life is a crime.
Immortality is a hex that just can't be worse.

- Jesse Knoblach
Cover photo by :icon90sigma: =90Sigma [link]

I made this poem so long ago, but when I first made it, I thought it really sucked. But now that I look at it now, I think "Whoa. . . that's deep." I've been meaning to upload it but never got around to it, so here you go.

Reading by ~kkbro123 : [link]
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TheBass20001 Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2013  Hobbyist
Can i do a reading of your poem?
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Clitical-Hit Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Sure
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TheBass20001 Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2013  Hobbyist
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IandaM98 Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2013  Student General Artist
Thank you for letting me use your poem for an English assignment. Here's what I did: [link]
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kkbro123 Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2013
hey! i liked this so I made a recording! credit to you is given in video and desc.

[link]
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Clitical-Hit Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
ou o Ohhhhhhh~ :iconmegusta: Thanks
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RoboKitty Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013
My personal theory: Immortality only sucks from a mortal's point of view. Gods were designed to be immortal, and while outliving all their loved ones obviously sucks their brains/minds/souls are designed to be able to live with it, as opposed to mortals who will go completely batty nuggets when just how long "forever" is

"I made this poem so long ago, but when I first made it, I thought it really sucked"
I had the first impression on my first read-through. On my second read-though it got a bit better. Short, quick, to the point
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sirtophatte Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2012
Death without life doesn't make any sense. You can't end something that hasn't started yet.
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Clitical-Hit Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Think about it this way; You live forever without death, it's a curse compared to those who lived a short life ended with death, which is a crime. You're thinking of the statement as a literal life that hasn't started. (The only comparison I can make it to is well. . . And I hate the timing, but Children ._. Life ended short)
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sirtophatte Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2012
So dying without having lived well yet, that makes sense
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Emerald-Alexandria Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2012  Student Writer
hey i'm from san tan bronies. must say, your poem is exquisite. great job!
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Clitical-Hit Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks o3o
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NeycuuRose1 Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
YOU.... MAKE ME WANNA CRYYYYYY
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Clitical-Hit Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
DO IT FILLY O3O
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NeycuuRose1 Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
*cries*
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drake-rex Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Congratulations for your poem :hug:
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Clitical-Hit Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks c:
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drake-rex Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:glomp:
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Clitical-Hit Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Over 325 favorites and it hasn't been 24 hours yet. X3X
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drake-rex Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Wow, you must be proud >w<
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Clitical-Hit Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Very o3o
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drake-rex Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Yay :iconepiclaplz:
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yugijak Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
That is extremely deep and deserves proper recognition on a site such as fanfiction or the like. I am rather appalled I have not heard this poem sooner.

Thank you for the deep and enlightening work. May it be graced with many fans and appreciates.
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Clitical-Hit Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Sooner? It hasn't been our for more than 24 hours yet >w< It's been sitting on my computer for months. xD Thanks c:
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yugijak Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
O.O

Even still I wish you'd put it up sooner. It's freaking amazing, it's deep, and above all it manages to fit into the FIM set up in a way no one should be able to complain about.

It's this kind of stuff I love to read.
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Clitical-Hit Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Try giving my other poem I made about Princess Luna. It's on my page. o3o
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yugijak Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Do you have a link?
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Clitical-Hit Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
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yugijak Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I'll take a look.
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Summer30 Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
What a wonderful poem
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Clitical-Hit Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks c:
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CrowleysPyramid Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2012
:iconfreddiemercuryplz::iconsays3plz:Who waaaaaaaaaaants to liiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiive foreverrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrr...
Who waaaaaaaaaaants to liiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiive foreverrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrr~?:music:


Poetry is definitely your special talent. This cuts right to the heart. :iconfluttercryplz:
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Clitical-Hit Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks c:
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BB-K Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Immortality and afraid of death isn't always nice. :( I know how that feels.

For the 2 princesses, Element Wielders born and die and possibly already been many of them. One day, they know that their current Mane 6 may one day pass away and Spike will have to go elsewhere as a full grown dragon is hard to keep. :(
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Dartmaul15 Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2012
We strictly don't know that, but it's the most logical thing to believe.

*conspiracy brain, i chose you*: The first time luna and celestia used the elements of harmony was to defeat discord long ago. It is not stated wether they were immortal or not. If the last one is the case, then how did they become immortal? The power of the elements of harmony? most likely.

It's not illegal to hope :/
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BB-K Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Yeah, pros and cons for being an immortal god or goddess. :( I really wish they could communicate with their past wielders by speaking with the spirits.
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Dartmaul15 Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2012
You do realize that luna and celestia was the fromer (and only known) wielders of the elements. What i hinted at was that the elemens granted them their imortality, and thus also might grant it to the mane 6.
Just an idea, and it doesn't even comflict canon.

Not sure if i would have taken it though.
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BB-K Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Hmm, looks like I was also reading another comic fiction which there are other wielders before the princesses themselves.
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Zugataga Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2012
That's really really beautiful, makes my eyes watery and it's HARD to make me cry... Really well done :)
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Clitical-Hit Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks c:
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DestroX71689 Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
And I didn't miss the point because I know the subject is about not being able to join the mortals in their eternal deadly slumber and feeling bad because they must end while the Princesses live forever.

1.To feel sad for every mortal who dies is to insinuate that death is a bad thing, that possibly there is no sort of better place for them or no sort of heaven, just rotting in the stinking earth or burning in a firey oblivion. As for the loved ones of the deceased, they will mourn and eventually go back to their normal lives, as all sane beings must if they are to remain that way.
2.To be jealous of death is to say that they simply don't enjoy living, why this would be so is beyond me but I could attribute it so a severe amount of repetition, and for that I say, go take a vacation, Luna and Celestia are old and I suppose even immortals deserve some sort of if not permanent retirement plan, go take a vacation from royalty and just hang out with the commoners.
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jaderheanna Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I think you're looking at it from a somewhat shallow point of view -- they're not so much mourning for others as for themselves. Selfish, perhaps, but true. A life of immortality where you had to watch everything around you change and die while you stayed stuck in one form, one age, for all eternity? With a life as long as Luna and Celestia's, a common pony's lifetime of friendship would be barely a blink to them.

You also seem to insinuate that wealth, beauty, power, and luxury are what makes life worth living. Everyone on earth, especially those who have all that, will tell you it isn't what they have that makes them happy, but who and what they've accomplished. Few are content with simple wealth and power.

If I was eternally unchanging, forced to rule over the night or day forever, and had to watch my friends die around me... I'd be depressed too. I'd feel a deep sense of longing for normalcy that is difficult to understand, as I often already do. Being adored or having money is far different from feeling included. I'd choose a poor, mortal life over a rich, eternal one any day, despite the fact that I fear my mortality.
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DestroX71689 Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Rising and setting the sun and the moon is something that takes them a maximum of 5 minutes a day. The can still go on vacation or something and remember to set 5 minutes for that shit. Big deal. Wealth, have you ever seen a fatcat who is miserable? This shit may work in acts of fiction but rich people are genuinely pretty happy. Also, they're royalty, they can do whatever the hell they want, what's everyone gonna do, say hey, be the princess! I'd be like fuck you I'm like a billion years old and I'm taking a vacation, I can't retire so I'm going on leave for a while, you know, see the world, see the shit that's changed, maybe I'll go blend in for a little while. My point is, life is only as good as you make it. Sitting around being sad all day is just boring so get over it and have soem fun every once in a while. I think this is probably what happened to Discord, he thought to himself, well hell, I'm gonna be alive forever so there's no consequences, I'll never die, might as well do whatever the hell I want. Remember this, he's immortal too, don't you feel in the least bit sorry for him? I'm willing to bet his entire race is dead and he's the last one left. You know what though, at least he's enjoying it when he isn't in stone, which must be a REAL hell. Celestia and Luna will NEVER have it as bad as him. I don't care, I don't feel sorry for them, at least they are loved and have lots of friends and even if their friends die, they'll have like thousands of new ones. Discord has NO friends. Not one. He's lived like his entire life, alone, and is STILL visibly happy about it.
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Clitical-Hit Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Annnnnnd you're over thinking the whole thing.
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DestroX71689 Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
The point of poetry is to challenge one's thought. I simply challenge it back. I'm not saying this is a bad poem, it's very well written and the subject matter is thought provoking, I just find it absolutely hilarious to say that rich, beautiful, immortal, powerful beings who could change their lifestyle in a second are living in a hell. I can see where there is bad in living forever but I see the glass as half full while the poem describes it as an empty abyss. I think that's a pathetic way to define a situation that arguably has many benefits as well as flaws. The end conclusion is that I still find that it isn't that horrible.
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DestroX71689 Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Feel bad for them?
1. They're royalty, they live in the utmost luxury, equipped with guards and servants to do their bidding and give them absolutely anything they desire.
2. Despite their age, they remain physically young and beautiful. Age has graced them with eternal physical grace which is not something that can be said for all immortals.
3. Even if it did suck, and they wanted to run away from the whole thing and pull a Princess Jasmine on the world, they could, they're magic, they'll find a way.
4. Being the rulers over the sun and moon is a bad thing? you can do whatever you want with that shit, besides is it that big a hassle, once a day isn't that big a deal.
5. You will never die! You don't have to fear death. Your family is immortal too so its not like you'll outlive them or something. You will be with them, forever, so it's almost like you're already in a sort of defective heaven.
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Clitical-Hit Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I think you missed the point :L
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DestroX71689 Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
What point, why are they all depressed being royal and immortal and rich and beautiful are all good things. Being ruler over the sun and moon is pretty cool too. They just need to get over it. Really, cause I can think of people who are in WAAAAAY worse situations than that. To complain about a life that luxurious is absolutely pathetic.
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Clitical-Hit Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Okay. Here the point. <----- And here's you. ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------ All --------------------------------------------------------------- way ------------------------------------------ Over ------------------------------------------ Here ---------------------> You.
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Comickit Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2012  Hobbyist
sorry but im laughing really hard at this/
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